I like the changes I've spotted! They make Gellert's ambitions even clearer (Albus' too, for that matter), with the desire to obtain the Hallows being boldly stated out loud. Clearer as well is the fact that any misgivings Albus may have are as nothing compared to the irresistible tide of desire, magic and power he's being carried away on. The "terribly beautiful things" at the end reads as a seductive and chilling promise, even if Albus is now so lost he's convinced himself this can only be for the good.

Looking forward to part III.